Critical Investigation learner response

Critical Investigation: first draft learner response

On your MEST4 coursework blog, complete the following tasks:

• Type up your teacher comments from your first draft - these are your main targets that you must address.

www: 

[] Your bibliography is impressive and you clearly know your genre. There is definitely the potential to improve this by a grade or two - but a few key areas to work on first. 

ebi: 

[] Written English is a huge problem: look at the number of errors highlighted just on the first page. It is essential to write grammatically correct sentences at A2 level (frankly: at GCSE level) 

[] There isn't a clear argument running through this ... it seems like the essay can't decide between the representation of youth and gender. I think you need to offer a positive and negative impact on audience for stereotypes and then explore these two sides throughout the essay.

[] Your bibliography is very good but there isn't enough evidence of this in your essay.Where are all the academic quotes discussing the impacts the impact of stereotypes? You also need to learn how to introduce a quote. 

[] Textual analysis is lacking: where is the detailed media terminology? Far too often you are simply describing the film and quoting lines.  

• Write what level/mark/grade you are aiming for in your second draft.

30+ [ Level 3 high] 

• Write a numbered action plan of at least five things - ideally one for each of the eight EBIs you received in feedback in your Peer Assessment lessons - that you will do or change for your second draft that will help you get there. Be specific and explain in detail.

- add in more references from my bibliography

- add in media terminology within my textual analysis 

- fix my written English - re-reading my paragraphs 

- present my argument clear - separate them in paragraphs  

MEST 4: Preliminary exercise: evaluation

1) Why did you choose this particular recreation and how does it link to your main production?
The location of clip i had chosen what quite easy to film, as it was during a school environment. In addition, to get 3 girls who aren't doing much whilst saying their lines was something that made it a little more easier for me to chose the clip that i did.
2) What difficulties did you face in producing this recreation?
As all of this had to be recorded outside, sound was difficult as it wasn't very clear because you could hear the wind within the clip. Another difficulty that came along with shooting the scene was that we rushed it as because it was during break time too this was because we couldn't get everyone together before this had to be submitted. 
3) What are the strengths of the production?
I was able to edit the clips very closely to the actual clip i had chosen to do. I was able to meet the brief of 30 seconds. 
4) What aspects would you look to improve?
-Sound 
- attention to detail.

5) What lessons will you take from this process that will help you with your main production?
- always check the sound 
- never rush a shooting - taking time and going over the clips once shot properly would be a benefit. 

6) Now that you are ready to start your actual linked production, explain clearly what you will be creating and how confident you are in delivering this. 
I will be creating a teen movie narrative - subverting from the traditional storyline (not 100% sure yet) but I'm fairly confident that i would be able to meet the standards that are required.